Is this poem of mine any good, advice?

Fatal Kiss

New member
“Rise Above or Fall Forever”

Broken promises, secrets uncovered
Friends become strangers
Lost and alone
Following nothing, drifting in the wind

Falling in the street
Screams of torture fall on deaf ears
Eyes look everywhere, expect me
No one helps, no one cares

Life’s battles worn me down
Blood runs down the street
A stream of scarlet rain
Feet walk all over me

Should I die this way?
Was this how my life was to end?
No, there must be more than this pain
Rise up, rise above, raise my head

Broken bones, torn flesh
Heart of stone, mind gone missing
Searching for myself, deep within
I lay inside myself for hours

Finding what went wrong
Where I lost track
Dust myself off, forgetting the past
Moving toward the future, toward my star
 
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