Is this poem good, I WROTE IT YESTURDAY NIGHT.?

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Abbie

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OMG that is amazing

i know this site you can go on to post a lot of poems, people will read them and comment

its called allpoetry.com
 
you spun me round'
i fell, i touched the ground
but still picked myself back up.
and i cant figure out, how or why.

was it because i dont need you?
all i have tried to do to please you.
everything, you told me, she had told you.
not words of yours, too good to be true.
those words repeat in my head, makes me blue.

lust at first sight, must hold on to fight.
this was a bite to the heart, rather something
sharper.. maybe a knife? it hurt i wont deny it.
it had to be you, to go and turn your back on me.

but now i realize you never cared for me.
you got plenty of laughs out of my
pain. do you feel like a big boy now?
feel grown up, hurting someone
who would never hurt you?

i hope your fucking proud.
yeah, i had to get these words out.
so this is fair well, goodbye.
aw, thanks and yeah i SWEAR ON EVERYTHING I LOVE it took me 10 minutes to think that up. i thought nobody would like it :(
im not sure of what i should name it though.. any suggestions?
Written by Bryanna Michelle<3
 
OMG that is amazing

i know this site you can go on to post a lot of poems, people will read them and comment

its called allpoetry.com
 
One thing I like about your poem is how honest, plain and simple it is and how does it touches the soul and speaks to it. for a moment I felt that I am in your shoes. Well done! Keep on writing more and more. practice makes perfect.
 
"Farewell, Goodbye"
For me, I'd rather here it put to music as a song, rather than just poetry. I think it would do better, and could be more expressive sung.
 
wow!
ure seriously really good at poetry!
That poem was really touching lol.. i actually had a lil tear in my eye.
cant believe it only took u like a day to write it!
overall its really good, well done, u should actually write sum more cuz that was AMAZING!! :) xx
 
wow!
ure seriously really good at poetry!
That poem was really touching lol.. i actually had a lil tear in my eye.
cant believe it only took u like a day to write it!
overall its really good, well done, u should actually write sum more cuz that was AMAZING!! :) xx
 
wow!
ure seriously really good at poetry!
That poem was really touching lol.. i actually had a lil tear in my eye.
cant believe it only took u like a day to write it!
overall its really good, well done, u should actually write sum more cuz that was AMAZING!! :) xx
 
wow!
ure seriously really good at poetry!
That poem was really touching lol.. i actually had a lil tear in my eye.
cant believe it only took u like a day to write it!
overall its really good, well done, u should actually write sum more cuz that was AMAZING!! :) xx
 
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