is this poem awful? please be truful becuase i already know i suck at poetry.?

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ok i write a lot of poetry. just alot of mess ups though. I was wondering if anyone actually liked my poetry.most people callme emo or gothbecuase i love black and poetrybut i dont cut my selfor anything so just please be truful about about my poem.


-As dawn breaks
the sparrow shall fall
from its perch high
in the willow place
dead shall rise
from the ground
and will the evils
of all darkness
as only a single soul
shall remain
but tortures to great depths
of evil and beaten
to his will


ok i know it sucked right? it was a free verse poem so it has no rhyme. i believe that poetry should be from the heart not the mind. half the time i dont relize what i write and its diferent kinda unique in its own way. thatone was acuatally like not a very good one. ihave somany poems. i fill notebooks up. im just looking for another on to use for a lil project imputting together and must of them are bad.
 
If you think you "suck", then you're already beaten. I think you're really just trying to protect yourself from hurtful "criticism" by saying that.

Most of the feedback so far has been very supportive, from what I've read. Keep going, my dear. Just keep writing!! Write well, write badly...just DO IT.

And please, please promise me you'll at least TRY to stop caring so much about what other people think, okay?
 
If you think you "suck", then you're already beaten. I think you're really just trying to protect yourself from hurtful "criticism" by saying that.

Most of the feedback so far has been very supportive, from what I've read. Keep going, my dear. Just keep writing!! Write well, write badly...just DO IT.

And please, please promise me you'll at least TRY to stop caring so much about what other people think, okay?
 
Holy crap youre horrible!

Kidding! That was really good. . . Not everyone can come up with cool stuff like this, keep up at it.
 
If you already know you 'suck' at poetry why would you bother asking if your poem is awful?
 
Actually is pretty good, i love free verse i think more that similar words, the whole thing should be about the meaning of the poem as a whole. A good example is robert frost, most of his poetry is free verse yet very deep and powerful, so dont think you are bad poet...keep writing... BTW i write poetry and short story myself as well...
 
I think its fabulous u rock at poetry! Continue yur career or start it! Its awesome!
 
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