Angie Jimenez
New member
okay i posted this poem twice and i got a lot of good comments and people seem to like it but it doesnt feel right to me. Especially when i throw in the word "ROBUST" i dont know it does sorta rhyme tho so give me good and bad commenet be truthfull..
TRUE COLORS
Im so blind i never noticed how unkind you really are.
I had this thought in my mind of us becoming close.
All the time i wasted on you i wish it could be bought.
I rememeber all of the times that we fought.
You always had a way of making feel small
but i will stand tall and ill never fall.
You think that your so clever
however i can see right through you.
whenever drama went down i was beside you
and i never lied to you, whatever happened to us.
You had a lust for drama.
But you lost my trust.
People told me to stay away from you.
They said that you were robust.
its about me and my friend who are really close but later on i notcie that she isnt that much of a good friend. a lot of people told me to stay away from her but i thought that there is no way that i am going to listen to these people...so i should of have tho cuz shes so dramatic! so good and bad comments please!
P.S i have writters block right now so i understand if some of u guys think that it sucks i heard tho that when people get writers block it goes away if u write a lot so that s why it might suck! :0
are the last two lines any good?
MCatn sorry if i spell your name wrong-thanks a lot but its actually not done.... yet! so yeah that would be a bad way to end it bu this is just what i got so far thanks
TRUE COLORS
Im so blind i never noticed how unkind you really are.
I had this thought in my mind of us becoming close.
All the time i wasted on you i wish it could be bought.
I rememeber all of the times that we fought.
You always had a way of making feel small
but i will stand tall and ill never fall.
You think that your so clever
however i can see right through you.
whenever drama went down i was beside you
and i never lied to you, whatever happened to us.
You had a lust for drama.
But you lost my trust.
People told me to stay away from you.
They said that you were robust.
its about me and my friend who are really close but later on i notcie that she isnt that much of a good friend. a lot of people told me to stay away from her but i thought that there is no way that i am going to listen to these people...so i should of have tho cuz shes so dramatic! so good and bad comments please!
P.S i have writters block right now so i understand if some of u guys think that it sucks i heard tho that when people get writers block it goes away if u write a lot so that s why it might suck! :0
are the last two lines any good?
MCatn sorry if i spell your name wrong-thanks a lot but its actually not done.... yet! so yeah that would be a bad way to end it bu this is just what i got so far thanks