is this an okay poem? How to make it better?

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Out with friends and having fun,

that little girl that once greeted you

and sung good night

now has a life
.
A life with out you.

Time flys and maybe that's why you never realized

im no longer a child

or that baby that cries for you.

why is it that im treated like it.

I don't need to be tucked in.

love you like you

love you like you mom,

im grown up.


(love you like you love you like you is what me and my mom said to each other when she tucked me in)
got any suggestions?
 
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