I need to know if this introduction is good, and strictly follow direct essay structure. I am in year 11.
This is is the essay question: "Describe the contributing factors if the French revolution in 1789."
This is what I have so far:
"The French Revolution of 1789 was the culmination of numerous contributing factors that occurred both internally and externally. These factors are comprised of political, economic and social causes, as well as external affairs such as wars and admiration for other systems of governments, provoked by the development of more logical ideologies." How can I briefly elaborate on the points that will be discussed in the main body, whilst still making sense.Also is it any good for grade 11?
This is is the essay question: "Describe the contributing factors if the French revolution in 1789."
This is what I have so far:
"The French Revolution of 1789 was the culmination of numerous contributing factors that occurred both internally and externally. These factors are comprised of political, economic and social causes, as well as external affairs such as wars and admiration for other systems of governments, provoked by the development of more logical ideologies." How can I briefly elaborate on the points that will be discussed in the main body, whilst still making sense.Also is it any good for grade 11?