Hey, its me again with another story. This is a rough draft so I still have lots of changes to make. Criticism accepted. 
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I trugded through the deep snow, squinting my eyes against the flakes that continiued to fall. It was quiet and dark. I had only the pale light from the street lamps.
Something black swept past me, making me jump and drop my purse. I looked around and bent down to pick up my purse. When I stood up, there was a tall man in front of me.
I gasped when she saw the man's eyes, which were burgundy. I tried to step back but he caught me around the waist with one arm. I tried to struggle while the man dragged me to the closest alley.
"Let me go! Please! Take my money, take my purse, take everything! Just please let me go! Don't hurt me!" I cried. He slammed me against a brick wall. "Shut up or else, understand?" He said. I nodded and hot tears started to run down my face.
Holding me against the wall with one arm, he pushed my head to the side and looked at my neck. The man leaned in close and put his lips to my neck. Suddenly I felt a sharp pain as two cold fangs pierced my flesh.
My heartbeat grew faster then slower and finally stopped as pure evil spread through my body. The man softly moaned and released me. I dropped to the ground, twitching and whimpering quietly.
Through the pain, I managed to whisper "Why?".
The man looked down at me and smiled a bloody smile. "You'll understand soon".
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I trugded through the deep snow, squinting my eyes against the flakes that continiued to fall. It was quiet and dark. I had only the pale light from the street lamps.
Something black swept past me, making me jump and drop my purse. I looked around and bent down to pick up my purse. When I stood up, there was a tall man in front of me.
I gasped when she saw the man's eyes, which were burgundy. I tried to step back but he caught me around the waist with one arm. I tried to struggle while the man dragged me to the closest alley.
"Let me go! Please! Take my money, take my purse, take everything! Just please let me go! Don't hurt me!" I cried. He slammed me against a brick wall. "Shut up or else, understand?" He said. I nodded and hot tears started to run down my face.
Holding me against the wall with one arm, he pushed my head to the side and looked at my neck. The man leaned in close and put his lips to my neck. Suddenly I felt a sharp pain as two cold fangs pierced my flesh.
My heartbeat grew faster then slower and finally stopped as pure evil spread through my body. The man softly moaned and released me. I dropped to the ground, twitching and whimpering quietly.
Through the pain, I managed to whisper "Why?".
The man looked down at me and smiled a bloody smile. "You'll understand soon".
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