Is this a good poem? ?

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I wrote this for my dad who passed a few weeks ago. The poem is going to be published in a leaflet at his funeral. Can you rate this poem for:
- How sad it is /10
- How touching it is /10
- How does it make you feel?
- What things need to be improved on?
- Anything else?

Heres the poem:
The day in which you left me
The moment you weren’t so warm
You were ultimately free
From your physical form.

Staring down at me you are now
Through perfect flawless eyes,
Stay with me shall you ought to vow,
And hear my helpless cries.

And now as I think of you
I only have one thing to say
I can’t help but feel blue
And I miss you, although its cliché

But you’re gazing down from above
Telling me you’re okay
Keep me from harm, give me your love
Until the end when comes the day.

Now never again shall we meet
Until god thinks the time is right
When for me, death becomes so sweet
And in heaven, shall we finally reunite.
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Also could someone give me a title for it? I was thinking of calling it heaven but then do you have any better one?
 
I'm sorry for your loss. I Liked your poem very much, It moves me. It is a 7 on sadness, and a 10 on touching others. And once again, I'm sorry for your loss.


P.S.
You could submit this poem at www.poetry.com and have a chance to win $10,000. If you do, I wish you the best of luck.
 
Wow, this is beautiful. I am so sorry for your lose and this poem will make your dad very proud and i am sure he is smiling down on you from heaven. Do not change anything about this poem.
 
i think this peom is good im srry for ur lose of ur father i think u should call it love of fath
 
iits very touching.. it made me sad...
im sorry for your loss...
maybe you could title it :dad or rest in peace
or maybe this is for you..

or leave in untilted.. its whatever you feel ....
 
10/10 touching
10/10 good
I think you don't need to fix it although you could maybe capitalize God
I thin you should call it reunite
 
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