Is this a good Poem????

[Mark]

I wrote it myself. i want to know if you like it.
Called "Crying Eyes"

wheres the lifes of mystic blue
and so i say i say to you
the death will live in strive to die
and dream to dream if dreams could fly,
the seams
of life are tyed to death and both
are link to every breath, in your life
live the dreams of your mind and in the
means, sorry tries. as dimes to dollers
to 3s to 5s see the tiny little lie and the
seams in crying eyes.

 

[greenielou]

I like it, but the end ( from the 3s to 5s part to the end) doesn't seem to flow a well as the rest of the poem.