Is this a good poem that I've written?

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It's really good!
A couple of tips;
It should be Regrets *are* spreading...
Take out the parenthesis. A lot of the beauty of poetry is the uncertainty of the meaning. Maybe change write dark literature to *let flow the darkness from my mind* or something like that, as well.

I really do like it! Keep writing!
 
Title: Expiration Date

I'm tired of people saying that everythings gonna be okay when its not gonna be okay

I just want all of the people to get out of my face
Life is a waste no matter what you say

I constantly ask questions but yet I get no answers
Regrets is spreading and destroying my body like cancer

I dont feel right
I dont like life
All I do is write dark literature hoping that I recieve light ( positive comments)..

Its plain to see that this world isnt meant for me
Why am I here when I dont wanna be?

What do these people see in life that I don't see?
All of these attacks are killing me..

I just wanna recieve love from my sister and brother ( like friends etc.)
They say you need to stop thinking like this, but it goes in one ear and out the other



People tell me to hold on, but I can't wait..
I'm ready to re arrange my expiration date..
 
It's really good!
A couple of tips;
It should be Regrets *are* spreading...
Take out the parenthesis. A lot of the beauty of poetry is the uncertainty of the meaning. Maybe change write dark literature to *let flow the darkness from my mind* or something like that, as well.

I really do like it! Keep writing!
 
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