Is this a good poem? It's just a rough ROUGH draft. Any tips?

Natalie

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Slowly deminishing into the fine lines of time
Dragging myself down this tunnel with no end
Yet i can still see the sun creeping into the horizon
I reach out towards it
feeling the warmth on my fingertips
Sending a shockwave throughout me
feeling so alive

the sun slowly dissapears into space
a distant diamond
consumed by the darkness
my hand falls to my side

Untouchable
Unreachable

Ps im not really a poem person. this is an assignment my english teacher is making me do.
 
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