is this a good poem?, am i lacking anything?

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i wrote this based off of a newspaper article saying a 5 year old girl was raped and drowned. please tell me if its a good poem or not..

Such sickening things happen now days in this world.
She was only 5 years old, raped and then drowned.
At that age you wouldn’t completely understand how wrong a crime like that is.
Not much you can do if you’re being forced to do something so wrong and are being overpowered.
After hearing about people like that it makes you wonder how they were raised.
How could you live like that knowing you may have scarred someone for life?
Killing her will never make you forget how big of a wrong you did.
Not only was she traumatized, but also her mother.
She may be gone now, but the people you hurt most will never forget.
I pray every night for these troubled people to understand what’s morally right and wrong in life.
 
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