Patriot2008
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Hello All!
So I am supposed to write 10 lines of free verse but am relatively new to poetry itself. Can someone look over this poem and tell me if it is crap or what I need to work on?
"Where Home Is"
He is but the age of eighteen
in a place not so serene
where the birds do not sing
and there is no heartbreak sting
where everyone is ready, for the peace to come steady
but fear is here to stay, as its possible that death has come to play
when that soldier thinks of home
he sees a place where the butterflies fly
where the symphonies sigh
where the sun shines so bright
where his love awaits long into the night
So I am supposed to write 10 lines of free verse but am relatively new to poetry itself. Can someone look over this poem and tell me if it is crap or what I need to work on?
"Where Home Is"
He is but the age of eighteen
in a place not so serene
where the birds do not sing
and there is no heartbreak sting
where everyone is ready, for the peace to come steady
but fear is here to stay, as its possible that death has come to play
when that soldier thinks of home
he sees a place where the butterflies fly
where the symphonies sigh
where the sun shines so bright
where his love awaits long into the night