Is my writing good for a 14 year old?

Onnie Jenson fell in love with Davis Chandler her sophomore year, and everything seemed to be going good, that is until her senior year when things started getting really bad. Davis starts hitting her and causing her to lose her mind. Now she is a mindless zombie in a sense walking around with Davis telling every what to do and hitting her more. What happens when Onnie's older brother Josh's best friend comes to stay with the family? Can Onnie realize that she has reasons to fight back with Davis? Will Onnie come on better terms with her Christian faith? It's Wrong Kind of Right


"Are you alright ms.Jenson?" My English teacher asked me, trying to figure me out. I looked up and gave him a brief nod, letting him know I was fine.

Today was Friday, A day a student should be happy right? Not me, I dread Fridays because I'm always doing the same boring two things. Staying home laying down or hanging with Davis. Davis is my boyfriend of three years, he is alright I guess, but he hits me and it scares me sometimes, but I know he would never do anything to put me in serious danger. He wasn't like that, he is loving, just made some mistakes in his life. It's my fault most of the time anyway, I always get in the way of his life. I hear the bell ringing so I grab my books and walk out of the classroom. No one greets me or gives me a friendly wave as I pass. I see the girls who use to be my friends, they just look at me for a moment and turn their heads. Sighing, I walk to the my next class room eager to be getting out of the halls. The day went by fast unfortunately for me, so I walked to the main entrance of the school and waited for Davis. I spotted him with his friends, and waited for him. I knew going up to him would result in me getting
slapped or something, so I waited like I was suppose to. He kissed me on the lips before guiding me to his car as soon as inside he looked at me.

"So, tomorrow we're going to a party at Jenni Mario's house, alright?" He said more a statement then a question. I nodded and he smiled, one reason I fell for him, his smile.

"Dressy or casual?" I asked peering at him.

"It's a party Onnie, not some business meeting for petes sake" He bent over and slapped me in the head. I nodded in agreement before turning my head away, careful not to let him see my tears.
 
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