Is my sestina any good?

dinofruit23

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It's for class, and I want to get a little feed back before I turn it in.
Thanks



My mind is drawn to nothing else,

There are too many things that I miss.

A broken, rotting well of inspiration

Reminds me that I am wrong

Scent of tea as I sit

And watch the snow fall.



I believed I wouldn’t fall.

Bearing it alone, merely wished for something else,

Something more than a wooden box. It wouldn’t sit

This, chaotic, fucked reality. I wouldn’t mind to miss

Something that is so cruelly wrong.

Drawing from death, my inspiration.



With every written word, it scars - my inspiration,

From fingers frozen in mourning, you fall

Father. I’m doing wrong.

Under these numbers, its you I miss.

underneath this facade, there’s nothing else,

but an empty gourd that sits.



These sinister things sit,

Congealing, and barring my uplifting inspiration.

Defecating, mentally devastating, so I miss

The sunnier aspects of the day. The fall

Of her auburn hair across her lips, what else

Did I lose while I was away? Wrong,



Again remind me that I am wrong.

That I am alone as I sit,

Trying to find something to write of, something else

Than hate, and cruelty. An inspiration

That can make me feel alive. Fall

Colors, jasmine tea, or the lovely auburn Miss?



Can I ever again find these things I miss?

The way I was naïve, but happy. Is it wrong

To hope for the same feeling that I wouldn’t fall

Into another pile of crap and sit

There alone? Will I find a permanent inspiration?

That doesn’t plague my heart like all else?



There is nothing else, nothing more that I miss.

My broken well of inspiration (broken self. I am wronged.

Smell of nostalgia as I sit, and watch myself fall.
 
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