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Hello, I'm brazilian and I'm learning the English and did this little essay, but but I do not know is which of the two is correct or easier to understand ....
You read it and show me where I can be wrong, please ..
Thanks!
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"Hi Basima!!
How are you?
Japan is a very interesting country, isn't it?
Did you know that in the year of 1908 the Japanese immigrated for Brazil?
That happened on the 18th of June.
This (this or that?) was a consequence of the disintegration of the Japanese rural layers, that had been happening since the mid 19th century"
For the Japanese government, the emigration represented the possibility to alliviate this crisis.
But their travel was not easy at all, it lasted 52 days, since they went by sea (in a ship called Kasato Maru).
Many of them were sent to work on coffees plantations (that up to today, it is still largely cultivated in Brazil).
The years passed by, and today Brazil shelters(shelters or has?) the biggest Japanese population outside Japan,
nearly 1,5 million of nikkeis (term used to call the Japanese and his descendants).
Today there are nearly 62000 Japanese inhabitants living in Brazil.
That`s a lot of people!!!
I hope i`ve been helpful!!!
Have a nice day,
Yui."
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"Hi Basima!!
How are you?
Japan is a very interesting country, isn't it?
Did you know that in the year of 1908 the first group of Japanese immigrants went to(went to or came to?) Brazil?
That happened on the 18th of June.
This/that(this or that?) was a consequence of the disintegration of the Japanese rural layers, that had been happening since the mid 19th century"
For the Japanese government, the emigration represented the possibility to alliviate this crisis.
But their travel was not easy at all, it lasted 52 days, since they went by sea (in a ship called Kasato Maru).
Many of them were sent to work on coffees plantations (that up to today, it is still largely cultivated in Brazil).
The years passed by, and today Brazil shelters(shelters or has?) the biggest Japanese population outside Japan,
Today there are nearly 1,5 million of nikkeis (term used to call the Japanese and his descendants) living in Brasil,of wich 62000 were born in Japan
That`s a lot of people!!!
I hope i`ve been helpful!!!
Have a nice day,
Yui."
thanks for attention, and excuse me if I wrote the English way weird, I'm translating the Portuguese into English in the "google translator".
•And please, show me what the correct words to use and which of the two essays are easier to understand!
Thank you very much!! ☺
You read it and show me where I can be wrong, please ..
Thanks!
-----------•1•---------
"Hi Basima!!
How are you?
Japan is a very interesting country, isn't it?
Did you know that in the year of 1908 the Japanese immigrated for Brazil?
That happened on the 18th of June.
This (this or that?) was a consequence of the disintegration of the Japanese rural layers, that had been happening since the mid 19th century"
For the Japanese government, the emigration represented the possibility to alliviate this crisis.
But their travel was not easy at all, it lasted 52 days, since they went by sea (in a ship called Kasato Maru).
Many of them were sent to work on coffees plantations (that up to today, it is still largely cultivated in Brazil).
The years passed by, and today Brazil shelters(shelters or has?) the biggest Japanese population outside Japan,
nearly 1,5 million of nikkeis (term used to call the Japanese and his descendants).
Today there are nearly 62000 Japanese inhabitants living in Brazil.
That`s a lot of people!!!
I hope i`ve been helpful!!!
Have a nice day,
Yui."
----------•2•---------
"Hi Basima!!
How are you?
Japan is a very interesting country, isn't it?
Did you know that in the year of 1908 the first group of Japanese immigrants went to(went to or came to?) Brazil?
That happened on the 18th of June.
This/that(this or that?) was a consequence of the disintegration of the Japanese rural layers, that had been happening since the mid 19th century"
For the Japanese government, the emigration represented the possibility to alliviate this crisis.
But their travel was not easy at all, it lasted 52 days, since they went by sea (in a ship called Kasato Maru).
Many of them were sent to work on coffees plantations (that up to today, it is still largely cultivated in Brazil).
The years passed by, and today Brazil shelters(shelters or has?) the biggest Japanese population outside Japan,
Today there are nearly 1,5 million of nikkeis (term used to call the Japanese and his descendants) living in Brasil,of wich 62000 were born in Japan
That`s a lot of people!!!
I hope i`ve been helpful!!!
Have a nice day,
Yui."
thanks for attention, and excuse me if I wrote the English way weird, I'm translating the Portuguese into English in the "google translator".
•And please, show me what the correct words to use and which of the two essays are easier to understand!
Thank you very much!! ☺