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I'm only 14, but my dream is to be one of New York Times youngest bestsellers.
So, I have decided to write a book, but I'm not sure if this is a good story line.
There's a girl names Abby, and a boy named John.
Abby is smart, and not that popular. She likes reading and science.
John is a hardcore rocker, who smokes, does drugs and dropped out of school to be with his band.
When Abby and John first see one-another, they instantly fall in love. But her friends don't like him, and his friends don't like her.
So, they decide to go behind their friends back, and have a secret relationship. But soon, their friends find out about their not-so-secret relationship, but don't tell Abby and John.
At the end, John ends up trying to save Abby, but accidently ends up killing her.
*and I think I'm going to make the very last sentence something like this;
He was devastated. No one had ever seen John Thompson cry, until now.
Do you think that's a good/okay story-line?
Anything i should change?
What do you like/dislike about it?
And ideas on the ending or beginning?
please please please please be brutally honest.
Thank You.
ps. the title is going to be, Winter of Love, or somethign liek that.
cause that winter was full of love! (L)
So, I have decided to write a book, but I'm not sure if this is a good story line.
There's a girl names Abby, and a boy named John.
Abby is smart, and not that popular. She likes reading and science.
John is a hardcore rocker, who smokes, does drugs and dropped out of school to be with his band.
When Abby and John first see one-another, they instantly fall in love. But her friends don't like him, and his friends don't like her.
So, they decide to go behind their friends back, and have a secret relationship. But soon, their friends find out about their not-so-secret relationship, but don't tell Abby and John.
At the end, John ends up trying to save Abby, but accidently ends up killing her.
*and I think I'm going to make the very last sentence something like this;
He was devastated. No one had ever seen John Thompson cry, until now.
Do you think that's a good/okay story-line?
Anything i should change?
What do you like/dislike about it?
And ideas on the ending or beginning?
please please please please be brutally honest.
Thank You.
ps. the title is going to be, Winter of Love, or somethign liek that.
cause that winter was full of love! (L)