Okay the following are some poems that i have written. please tell me what you think of each one.
Undertow.
If the world is gone then where will I go.
I'm tossed in the wind like a flake of snow.
No control of where, how, or even when.
I used to know, but this is now and that was then.
When the world collapses around my ears.
No one will be there to see the tears.
Freshly spilled like a river of blood.
Emotions slip out caught in the flood.
I'm grasping at straws with no sense of direction.
Try as I might my life's far from perfection.
It started as a flaw, a crack in the glass.
Then it grew bigger and I fell flat on my ***.
So, if the world is gone then where will I go?
Do not ask me cause I can hardly know.
By: James Casteel
Day Break.
Night always comes, inky and grim.
To swallow up day til it fills to the brim.
We all have to wait for dusk to turn day.
But when it does, its worth it we say.
Day is now as perpetual as night seemed.
The sun on our skin as warm as we dreamed.
By: James Casteel
Ephemeral.
Her soul is lost for but a few.
Life extinguished like morning dew.
A life lost is cause for weep.
It's a mighty wall deaths vines will creep.
When the day is done, and death has won.
Life still shines a burning sun.
By: James Casteel
Love
Love is like fire it's hot and it burns.
The one thing in life for which everyone yearns.
The thing I can't hold, the thing I can't grasp.
Love holds my heart in it's clasp.
By James Casteel
Death
People come and people go.
Like the tides we ebb and flow.
Adamant I await for my time to pass.
When death comes to shatter life like glass.
I will look the reaper in the eyes.
Gently as i fall to my demise.
By James Casteel.
Undertow.
If the world is gone then where will I go.
I'm tossed in the wind like a flake of snow.
No control of where, how, or even when.
I used to know, but this is now and that was then.
When the world collapses around my ears.
No one will be there to see the tears.
Freshly spilled like a river of blood.
Emotions slip out caught in the flood.
I'm grasping at straws with no sense of direction.
Try as I might my life's far from perfection.
It started as a flaw, a crack in the glass.
Then it grew bigger and I fell flat on my ***.
So, if the world is gone then where will I go?
Do not ask me cause I can hardly know.
By: James Casteel
Day Break.
Night always comes, inky and grim.
To swallow up day til it fills to the brim.
We all have to wait for dusk to turn day.
But when it does, its worth it we say.
Day is now as perpetual as night seemed.
The sun on our skin as warm as we dreamed.
By: James Casteel
Ephemeral.
Her soul is lost for but a few.
Life extinguished like morning dew.
A life lost is cause for weep.
It's a mighty wall deaths vines will creep.
When the day is done, and death has won.
Life still shines a burning sun.
By: James Casteel
Love
Love is like fire it's hot and it burns.
The one thing in life for which everyone yearns.
The thing I can't hold, the thing I can't grasp.
Love holds my heart in it's clasp.
By James Casteel
Death
People come and people go.
Like the tides we ebb and flow.
Adamant I await for my time to pass.
When death comes to shatter life like glass.
I will look the reaper in the eyes.
Gently as i fall to my demise.
By James Casteel.