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I wrote this poem. Im 14 and i love writing poems.
I put this poem on here a couple of days ago and i deleted it, but this is my new improved version.
Please leave comments to say if you like it and if you don't, please don't just put no - explain why and tell me how i could maybe improve it.
I AM THE ONE
I am the shadows that loom in the dark, hiding away all night,
I am the one who will be right there all the time but only out of sight,
I am the one who drew those blinds and watched you eat your tea,
I am the one who likes your dogs - but they won't play with me.
I am the one who was best in the class when I went to school,
but now sitting there in my place is only my empty stool.
I am the one who was popular and also had many friends,
I am the one who all those people to whom their love they send.
I am the one who was standing there in the road on Christmas eve,
I am the one who watched you go by in your car along with Steve.
I am the one who stood silently when I was supposed to sing,
I am the one who rang the bell just to hear it ring.
I am the girl standing here who cant do that anymore,
I am the girl who waits for you in the corridor,
I am the girl who watches your every little move,
I am the girl who listens to your prayers when you sit in the wooden booth.
I am the girl who had loads of fun in my short 12 years of life,
I am the one who will always fail – always fail to strive.
I am the girl you ran over when I was walking to school,
But you are the one who will always be scorned at and be called a fool.
I am the one who will watch over you for all your years to come,
I am the girl who will never have friends and certainly never have fun.
I am the girl who will never cry when I see your bitter face,
I am the one who will never feel the breeze blowing in my face.
I am the one who will always without fail – always pass you by,
But I am the girl who had a life – the one that had to die.
It was written for a friends friend - she got hit by a driver who was talking on his mobile phone whilst driving.
It happened 2 years back.
I wrote it to be confusing at first so you wonder what it goes on about.
I hope you enjoy it.
Thanks.
I put this poem on here a couple of days ago and i deleted it, but this is my new improved version.
Please leave comments to say if you like it and if you don't, please don't just put no - explain why and tell me how i could maybe improve it.
I AM THE ONE
I am the shadows that loom in the dark, hiding away all night,
I am the one who will be right there all the time but only out of sight,
I am the one who drew those blinds and watched you eat your tea,
I am the one who likes your dogs - but they won't play with me.
I am the one who was best in the class when I went to school,
but now sitting there in my place is only my empty stool.
I am the one who was popular and also had many friends,
I am the one who all those people to whom their love they send.
I am the one who was standing there in the road on Christmas eve,
I am the one who watched you go by in your car along with Steve.
I am the one who stood silently when I was supposed to sing,
I am the one who rang the bell just to hear it ring.
I am the girl standing here who cant do that anymore,
I am the girl who waits for you in the corridor,
I am the girl who watches your every little move,
I am the girl who listens to your prayers when you sit in the wooden booth.
I am the girl who had loads of fun in my short 12 years of life,
I am the one who will always fail – always fail to strive.
I am the girl you ran over when I was walking to school,
But you are the one who will always be scorned at and be called a fool.
I am the one who will watch over you for all your years to come,
I am the girl who will never have friends and certainly never have fun.
I am the girl who will never cry when I see your bitter face,
I am the one who will never feel the breeze blowing in my face.
I am the one who will always without fail – always pass you by,
But I am the girl who had a life – the one that had to die.
It was written for a friends friend - she got hit by a driver who was talking on his mobile phone whilst driving.
It happened 2 years back.
I wrote it to be confusing at first so you wonder what it goes on about.
I hope you enjoy it.
Thanks.