i wrote it bc its almost his birthday (hes been gone many yrs now) but bc im not in the best of mood, its probably not the best poem... its not really finished, seems kinda broken. but any comments? & its ok if u dont like it, i can handle criticism.
i still cry
i still shed tears
i still wonder why
i havent had you these past 10 years
it may have been awhile
but my smile still breaks
and through my journeys miles
i have made many mistakes
ive grown up now daddy
but i still feel so small
are you disappoined in me
that ive built up this wall
i try to be
someone you will love
daddy, do you still love me
am i a daughter you are proud of
if you can hear
at night i pray
my memories havent disappeared
but i want back whats been taken away
@ Alix- i emailed her, i wasnt really sure what u wanted me to say, so i just said what i was thinking.. this is what i wrote:
hi, someone on yahoo answers told me to come to your page. first, i am so sorry for your loss... id like to say "i understand," but i know that no one REALLY knows how you feel except you, i lost my dad when i was 9. at times i still struggle. but its been almost 10 yrs for me... i have found reasons to smile. i dont know why but the song "The Middle" by jimmy eat world has gotten me through some rough patches, search for the acoustic version if you want to give it a listen. i like to think im pretty good at giving advice, so if u ever want to talk email my yahoo answers, http://answers.yahoo.com/activity;_ylt=Au66_Jt.MVWXeRa7iaM.xV3sy6IX;_ylv=3?show=QBV6Dtmyaa&view=public thats me, my names shannon. even if u dont want advice, but u just feel like taking your mind off things, i can talk about something random like weather or w/e too. hope, peace, love, & well
i still cry
i still shed tears
i still wonder why
i havent had you these past 10 years
it may have been awhile
but my smile still breaks
and through my journeys miles
i have made many mistakes
ive grown up now daddy
but i still feel so small
are you disappoined in me
that ive built up this wall
i try to be
someone you will love
daddy, do you still love me
am i a daughter you are proud of
if you can hear
at night i pray
my memories havent disappeared
but i want back whats been taken away
@ Alix- i emailed her, i wasnt really sure what u wanted me to say, so i just said what i was thinking.. this is what i wrote:
hi, someone on yahoo answers told me to come to your page. first, i am so sorry for your loss... id like to say "i understand," but i know that no one REALLY knows how you feel except you, i lost my dad when i was 9. at times i still struggle. but its been almost 10 yrs for me... i have found reasons to smile. i dont know why but the song "The Middle" by jimmy eat world has gotten me through some rough patches, search for the acoustic version if you want to give it a listen. i like to think im pretty good at giving advice, so if u ever want to talk email my yahoo answers, http://answers.yahoo.com/activity;_ylt=Au66_Jt.MVWXeRa7iaM.xV3sy6IX;_ylv=3?show=QBV6Dtmyaa&view=public thats me, my names shannon. even if u dont want advice, but u just feel like taking your mind off things, i can talk about something random like weather or w/e too. hope, peace, love, & well