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here's the poem:
I walk up the steps, I reach the door,
My eyes squint at the silver bolt,
Easy and quietly I must unbolt,
Careful, not to disturb a single snore.
The door scraps open and I shaded eyes,
My vision blurred by the pearl white light,
The corners of my mouth curved into a smile,
For before me lay the violet skies.
I went through the portal and saw the fireflies dance,
Saw the bats make their way to right,
But my eyes longed for the ornament of night,
And so my gaze followed the path of pearly light.
I spotted it atlast, between those 7 stars,
Shining ever so bright was the king of night.
Mooning over the moon I was when
I saw a shooting star, it was such a beautiful sight.
Breeze blew in my hair when I realized,
Clouds had hovered over the king of night.
The sky turned rust and the breeze turned harsh,
I felt a freezing drop drop on my hand.
It was past midnight, I think it was,
I was rushing back down the staircase now,
My clothes are clammy, I care not,
I will just sleep cozy, with the rain now on.
DOUBTS n OTHER STUFF:
1. Is moon supposed to be KING or QUEEN of night?
2. There is not really any particular rhyme scheme[I mean, there are rhyme schemes, but they are all different] followed. but, Should I?
3. I liked my poem at the beginning, but then it dragged on. Help me mend it?
4. Do you think I should insert another verse before last one?
5. I want to keep this poem quiet and mysterious like, u getting what I mean??
Thanks
I walk up the steps, I reach the door,
My eyes squint at the silver bolt,
Easy and quietly I must unbolt,
Careful, not to disturb a single snore.
The door scraps open and I shaded eyes,
My vision blurred by the pearl white light,
The corners of my mouth curved into a smile,
For before me lay the violet skies.
I went through the portal and saw the fireflies dance,
Saw the bats make their way to right,
But my eyes longed for the ornament of night,
And so my gaze followed the path of pearly light.
I spotted it atlast, between those 7 stars,
Shining ever so bright was the king of night.
Mooning over the moon I was when
I saw a shooting star, it was such a beautiful sight.
Breeze blew in my hair when I realized,
Clouds had hovered over the king of night.
The sky turned rust and the breeze turned harsh,
I felt a freezing drop drop on my hand.
It was past midnight, I think it was,
I was rushing back down the staircase now,
My clothes are clammy, I care not,
I will just sleep cozy, with the rain now on.
DOUBTS n OTHER STUFF:
1. Is moon supposed to be KING or QUEEN of night?
2. There is not really any particular rhyme scheme[I mean, there are rhyme schemes, but they are all different] followed. but, Should I?
3. I liked my poem at the beginning, but then it dragged on. Help me mend it?
4. Do you think I should insert another verse before last one?
5. I want to keep this poem quiet and mysterious like, u getting what I mean??
Thanks