I wrote this poem and what does the community think?

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The first part is how his own apartment is missing him and the copious amounts of coffee he drinks because he is depressed during the night and the last part is how this guy is with this girl actually copulating. I am 16 and would like an honest opinion.

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Chiffonier with teacups sim.
Filled with shami up to brim,
Plethora cupful coffee dim,
Waiting, staring, searching for him.

Lokum tasted, lozenge to follow,
Waiting for Lolita to swallow,
Fledged birds; they are callow,
In mind, but the appearance of Apollo.

Naked shoulders, and brassiere less,
The sweet mellow sound of unfastening her dress.
 
ummm nice sonnet but i didn't understand most of it to be honest and the last bit well.... for a 16 year old it's kind of uncalled for but still i'm only 14 so how would i know?
 
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