I wrote dialog to my story can someone PLZ HELP with the actions?

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(Catherine caught her bestfriend and boyfriend kissing)

"No!" Catherine screamed.
Jean flinched and turned to her. "Catherine."
She ran to them, extending her hand back to slap her. "You!"
Johnny quickly caught her before she could get her hands on her.

(rewrite this for the better and win or give me tips)
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Everything Catherine knew screeched to a halt. All that filled her horror-struck vision now was the image imprinted on her brain. The image of her bestfriend and boyfriend intertwined. But this only happened in movies. Didn't it?
"No!" Catherine screamed.
Jean wrenched her mouth away from Johnny's. "Catherine!" She gasped.
"Yes, it's me! The best friend! The girlfriend of the one you are kissing!" She ran wildly towards the paralyzed couple, deciding the slap Jean with all the force she could possibly exert.
Johnny reached out and grabbed Catherine's wrists, holding them behind her back. Catherine twisted angrily. "Let go of me!" She spat into his face.
 
Everything Catherine knew screeched to a halt. All that filled her horror-struck vision now was the image imprinted on her brain. The image of her bestfriend and boyfriend intertwined. But this only happened in movies. Didn't it?
"No!" Catherine screamed.
Jean wrenched her mouth away from Johnny's. "Catherine!" She gasped.
"Yes, it's me! The best friend! The girlfriend of the one you are kissing!" She ran wildly towards the paralyzed couple, deciding the slap Jean with all the force she could possibly exert.
Johnny reached out and grabbed Catherine's wrists, holding them behind her back. Catherine twisted angrily. "Let go of me!" She spat into his face.
 
Everything Catherine knew screeched to a halt. All that filled her horror-struck vision now was the image imprinted on her brain. The image of her bestfriend and boyfriend intertwined. But this only happened in movies. Didn't it?
"No!" Catherine screamed.
Jean wrenched her mouth away from Johnny's. "Catherine!" She gasped.
"Yes, it's me! The best friend! The girlfriend of the one you are kissing!" She ran wildly towards the paralyzed couple, deciding the slap Jean with all the force she could possibly exert.
Johnny reached out and grabbed Catherine's wrists, holding them behind her back. Catherine twisted angrily. "Let go of me!" She spat into his face.
 
Everything Catherine knew screeched to a halt. All that filled her horror-struck vision now was the image imprinted on her brain. The image of her bestfriend and boyfriend intertwined. But this only happened in movies. Didn't it?
"No!" Catherine screamed.
Jean wrenched her mouth away from Johnny's. "Catherine!" She gasped.
"Yes, it's me! The best friend! The girlfriend of the one you are kissing!" She ran wildly towards the paralyzed couple, deciding the slap Jean with all the force she could possibly exert.
Johnny reached out and grabbed Catherine's wrists, holding them behind her back. Catherine twisted angrily. "Let go of me!" She spat into his face.
 
Everything Catherine knew screeched to a halt. All that filled her horror-struck vision now was the image imprinted on her brain. The image of her bestfriend and boyfriend intertwined. But this only happened in movies. Didn't it?
"No!" Catherine screamed.
Jean wrenched her mouth away from Johnny's. "Catherine!" She gasped.
"Yes, it's me! The best friend! The girlfriend of the one you are kissing!" She ran wildly towards the paralyzed couple, deciding the slap Jean with all the force she could possibly exert.
Johnny reached out and grabbed Catherine's wrists, holding them behind her back. Catherine twisted angrily. "Let go of me!" She spat into his face.
 
Everything Catherine knew screeched to a halt. All that filled her horror-struck vision now was the image imprinted on her brain. The image of her bestfriend and boyfriend intertwined. But this only happened in movies. Didn't it?
"No!" Catherine screamed.
Jean wrenched her mouth away from Johnny's. "Catherine!" She gasped.
"Yes, it's me! The best friend! The girlfriend of the one you are kissing!" She ran wildly towards the paralyzed couple, deciding the slap Jean with all the force she could possibly exert.
Johnny reached out and grabbed Catherine's wrists, holding them behind her back. Catherine twisted angrily. "Let go of me!" She spat into his face.
 
Everything Catherine knew screeched to a halt. All that filled her horror-struck vision now was the image imprinted on her brain. The image of her bestfriend and boyfriend intertwined. But this only happened in movies. Didn't it?
"No!" Catherine screamed.
Jean wrenched her mouth away from Johnny's. "Catherine!" She gasped.
"Yes, it's me! The best friend! The girlfriend of the one you are kissing!" She ran wildly towards the paralyzed couple, deciding the slap Jean with all the force she could possibly exert.
Johnny reached out and grabbed Catherine's wrists, holding them behind her back. Catherine twisted angrily. "Let go of me!" She spat into his face.
 
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