i wrote a short conversation. can someone help me add spice?

Jane

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(Jean jumped on top of tall soft bed. She just came from the airport)

"I feel like I’m sinking into a marshmallow!” Jean screamed.
"While you unpack I’ll be at the store, my maid will help you."
“Don’t leave me,” Jean laughed.
“I’m gonna buy something for my phone, I'll be fast.”
Jean twisted her body rolled over on her back and smiled, "Alright, hurry we have so much to talk about."

(rewrite this and win or give me tips) dont say i dont wanna rewrite it. ok then dont
 
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