I wrote a poem and am looking for advice on meter, rhyme, content, and overall warm

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feelings it gives you? K? Liar head liar head
get out of here.
I'm hungry and out of beer.
You're just lying
so shut up please.
Momma made me mashed taters and peas.
Your lips are still moving
and I don't like it at all.
Do they still sell Orange Julius at the mall?
Your face is, ummmm, dumb looking and pale
Never buy unders at a garage sale.
Well, I'm hungry, so see ya around.
Ummm, hey! I used to buy weed by the pound.
 
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