I would like an opinion about this poem please.?

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her mirror must be smokey
or simply can't she see
blinded by the emptiness
she keeps so close in need
holding onto dreams not her own
being something she doesn't want to be
living up to expectations
she is in too deep
rising above them all
is only just a dream
everyday monotonous
she longs to break free
so she wakes every morning
from her peaceful sleep
she looks into her mirror
still, she isn't seeing.
I did write this poem.
 
That is an AMAZING poem. I love it! Have you written any others? This one is totally worth publishing. Seriously, it's THAT good. What's the title?
 
Another good one, Kaity. I have written a number of doom and gloom poems myself - they're FUN to write because we make them breathe !!!
 
Gorgeous! Whats the name of it? Wow it flowed perfectly! It really captures the dilemma women go through for when they look at themselves! Awesome!
 
I really like that!
exept i dont like the ending 'she isnt seeing'..
Did u write it yourself?
.x
 
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