I WANT TO SHOW THIS POEM THAT I MADE TO THE MILITARY VETS.. PLEASE CRITIQUE!!!...

...NOW PLEASE? Stuck in this desert
Feels like hell
Day by day, wait on the enemy
This might be the day for God to get me
Stuck in this desert
With my troops
Going insane
Don’t know what to do
Death refuses to give me a clue
Down in the dumps and feel so blue
My arrival in America
Things have change
Same old stuff
Seems re-arranged
Transformation to this life
Doesn’t seem right
All I’ve been taught is to take life
Left the war in the past
But it runs after me
Thinking this life is just a fantasy
Now I’m on the run
Never been taught to run
Now I want to take my life with this gun….
 
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