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"Hobo Congregation"
Stephen Rodriguez
They sat around the garbage can
and man by man, they told their share
of knowledge rare and hard to find;
the restless kind that keeps you up at night.
One talked of trees and how they stare,
"I've seen them glare at me before!
they screech and roar, they're mad at me
because I pee on them when they're asleep.
And one in whispers told the rest
that as he guessed, the end is near.
"The end is HERE!", another said
and shot his head from side to side to side.
A third was pulling at his hair.
"I wonder where they're going to,"
He said askew, "it's so bizarre!
they won't get far unless I cut them free."
And all the time I watched them talk
such crazy gawk that I felt bad
and wished I had some extra change,
or more loose brains so I could join them too.
*Clear images?
*Good flow?
*Interesting storyline?
*Analysis?
*Suggestions?
"Hobo Congregation"
Stephen Rodriguez
They sat around the garbage can
and man by man, they told their share
of knowledge rare and hard to find;
the restless kind that keeps you up at night.
One talked of trees and how they stare,
"I've seen them glare at me before!
they screech and roar, they're mad at me
because I pee on them when they're asleep.
And one in whispers told the rest
that as he guessed, the end is near.
"The end is HERE!", another said
and shot his head from side to side to side.
A third was pulling at his hair.
"I wonder where they're going to,"
He said askew, "it's so bizarre!
they won't get far unless I cut them free."
And all the time I watched them talk
such crazy gawk that I felt bad
and wished I had some extra change,
or more loose brains so I could join them too.
*Clear images?
*Good flow?
*Interesting storyline?
*Analysis?
*Suggestions?
