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...HOORAY! This is part 2 
? Here's part one, in case you didn't read it before (feel free to review that one too!):
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Ah2NctG15U4s1kzHuJ..rcvty6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20101225175137AAUHxZS
Thanks! And to answer the questions that everyone asked before: no, it isn't all just a dream. It all really happens and is really, really, real. Lol. I have an explanation for everything, but not until later in the book!
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I think I left off saying (from my previous question) that the mysterious woman named Jocasta from the Inn was dragging Daxter into an alleyway. But instead of pressing a blade against his neck like the young girl had, she smothered him in hugs and kisses. Confused, Daxter backs away, but the woman named Jocasta begins to say that she knows that his name isn't really Elathan Loyalar, nor is he a nomad from the Mountains of Aria. She knows that he is from Earth. But she says that Daxter's full name is Daxter Decimus Scarch. He shakes his head, explaining that his name is Daxter Jakob Locke, and that she's got the wrong boy... but Jocasta continues to argue that Daxter Decimus Scarch is his real, Athrian name. Daxter Locke must be his Earth name. She said that, when Daxter was very young, but a year old, she was the one that assisted his mother in taking Daxter to Earth for his own protection. She'd known his mother for many, many years and often watched over her when she was younger. That way, she knew his Athrian name, yet not his Earth name.
Daxter remains quiet, not bothering to talk to her but to ask her a few questions. He's in a state of shock and disbelief. He begins to question whether or not all of this is real or not. If he's simply dreaming... besides, people having voices in their heads, and magic is not possible. Very much impossible, in fact.
Jocasta proceeds on and shows him a secret way into the castle that can be used to get into the catacombs underneath the castle, but she won't be taking that way because he needs to speak with the King upfront.
Jocasta tells him to continue on being Elathan Loyalar, and explains who Elathan Loyalar actually is. She explains that Elathan Loyalar was the son of the King, Primus, the same age as Daxter. Elathan, when he was a young boy, ran away into the Mountains of Aria to escape his fate. His fate being the chosen one from the prophecy, or so everyone thought, and they nearly forced him to go up against his dreaded uncle, who isn't yet important... After that, Primus' guards went to search the Mountains of Aria, but each and every villager there had the same story to tell: Elathan had simply vanished in the midst of night, leaving behind only a scrap of paper with poorly misshapen letters hastily scrawled on it. They said it with such sincerity in their eyes, and everyone knows that Arian Nomads are the most truthful of anyone, because without truth and pride, the only thing they have left is the cold, white snow around them. They move around in small groups of the same people all of their lives because they are trusting and honest people. If they were liars and theives, they would live alone in their own area on the side of the mountain, and most likely freeze to death.
Daxter, when they arrive at the castle, meet his "father", Primus, the King, and luckily, Primus fell hard for the trick, and believed that Daxter was truly Elathan, his son.
Daxter got to stay inside the castle, in the room at the top of the 4th turret that used to belong to Elathan himself. Jocasta said that there were rumors going around that turret number 4 is haunted by Elathan's very soul, and it may, because although Daxter is posing to be Elathan and is very much alive, he is not Elathan.
Meanwhile, Daxter goes out to prepare (once again) to fight his "uncle". Daxter hasn't heard anything about this "uncle" or why he is so bad, all that he knows is that he has to return home before the actual day comes, although a little training could come in handy.
He stays, and learns to ride a pegasi, a unicorn, and a regular horse, although he isn't very skilled at it and can not ride any faster than a trot. He is fitted for a sword that is hand-crafted by Trilo's blacksmith (Trilo is a wealthy town that surrounds the castle) out of the finest metals in the land and reinforced with magical properties that emits light that can easily slash through shadows. He even takes archery lessons and gives an attempt at magic. However, he pretends to be very bad at magic with the help of Jocasta, but the real reason he can not perform magic is because he is mortal, from having lived on Earth for so long. His mind is magical, yet his body is mortal, so he can see magic and is affected by it, he just can not procure it himself. Whereas most mortals can neither see it nor are affected by it. It simply passes through them. They are considered stupid becaus
Oh boy. I forgot to put the actual question...
The question is the same as that from the first question. Will you review my first book? I jsut want to know your opinion on the content Nothing else, like spelling or grammar, because this is just a rough draft.
Could you possibly give me your opinions on my characters too? Thanks!
? Here's part one, in case you didn't read it before (feel free to review that one too!):http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Ah2NctG15U4s1kzHuJ..rcvty6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20101225175137AAUHxZS
Thanks! And to answer the questions that everyone asked before: no, it isn't all just a dream. It all really happens and is really, really, real. Lol. I have an explanation for everything, but not until later in the book!
- - - - -
I think I left off saying (from my previous question) that the mysterious woman named Jocasta from the Inn was dragging Daxter into an alleyway. But instead of pressing a blade against his neck like the young girl had, she smothered him in hugs and kisses. Confused, Daxter backs away, but the woman named Jocasta begins to say that she knows that his name isn't really Elathan Loyalar, nor is he a nomad from the Mountains of Aria. She knows that he is from Earth. But she says that Daxter's full name is Daxter Decimus Scarch. He shakes his head, explaining that his name is Daxter Jakob Locke, and that she's got the wrong boy... but Jocasta continues to argue that Daxter Decimus Scarch is his real, Athrian name. Daxter Locke must be his Earth name. She said that, when Daxter was very young, but a year old, she was the one that assisted his mother in taking Daxter to Earth for his own protection. She'd known his mother for many, many years and often watched over her when she was younger. That way, she knew his Athrian name, yet not his Earth name.
Daxter remains quiet, not bothering to talk to her but to ask her a few questions. He's in a state of shock and disbelief. He begins to question whether or not all of this is real or not. If he's simply dreaming... besides, people having voices in their heads, and magic is not possible. Very much impossible, in fact.
Jocasta proceeds on and shows him a secret way into the castle that can be used to get into the catacombs underneath the castle, but she won't be taking that way because he needs to speak with the King upfront.
Jocasta tells him to continue on being Elathan Loyalar, and explains who Elathan Loyalar actually is. She explains that Elathan Loyalar was the son of the King, Primus, the same age as Daxter. Elathan, when he was a young boy, ran away into the Mountains of Aria to escape his fate. His fate being the chosen one from the prophecy, or so everyone thought, and they nearly forced him to go up against his dreaded uncle, who isn't yet important... After that, Primus' guards went to search the Mountains of Aria, but each and every villager there had the same story to tell: Elathan had simply vanished in the midst of night, leaving behind only a scrap of paper with poorly misshapen letters hastily scrawled on it. They said it with such sincerity in their eyes, and everyone knows that Arian Nomads are the most truthful of anyone, because without truth and pride, the only thing they have left is the cold, white snow around them. They move around in small groups of the same people all of their lives because they are trusting and honest people. If they were liars and theives, they would live alone in their own area on the side of the mountain, and most likely freeze to death.
Daxter, when they arrive at the castle, meet his "father", Primus, the King, and luckily, Primus fell hard for the trick, and believed that Daxter was truly Elathan, his son.
Daxter got to stay inside the castle, in the room at the top of the 4th turret that used to belong to Elathan himself. Jocasta said that there were rumors going around that turret number 4 is haunted by Elathan's very soul, and it may, because although Daxter is posing to be Elathan and is very much alive, he is not Elathan.
Meanwhile, Daxter goes out to prepare (once again) to fight his "uncle". Daxter hasn't heard anything about this "uncle" or why he is so bad, all that he knows is that he has to return home before the actual day comes, although a little training could come in handy.
He stays, and learns to ride a pegasi, a unicorn, and a regular horse, although he isn't very skilled at it and can not ride any faster than a trot. He is fitted for a sword that is hand-crafted by Trilo's blacksmith (Trilo is a wealthy town that surrounds the castle) out of the finest metals in the land and reinforced with magical properties that emits light that can easily slash through shadows. He even takes archery lessons and gives an attempt at magic. However, he pretends to be very bad at magic with the help of Jocasta, but the real reason he can not perform magic is because he is mortal, from having lived on Earth for so long. His mind is magical, yet his body is mortal, so he can see magic and is affected by it, he just can not procure it himself. Whereas most mortals can neither see it nor are affected by it. It simply passes through them. They are considered stupid becaus
Oh boy. I forgot to put the actual question...
The question is the same as that from the first question. Will you review my first book? I jsut want to know your opinion on the content Nothing else, like spelling or grammar, because this is just a rough draft.
Could you possibly give me your opinions on my characters too? Thanks!