I need someone to critique my "4-H Camp Rap"?

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please only answer this if you know anything about 4-H camp.

i'm a delaware, to be chief this year, and a cherokee brave has challenged me to a rap battle for camp. below is the rhyme i wrote.

please offer suggestions, comments, ideas, whatever, but any rude answers will be hidden, and you won't get any points whatsoever.

thanks.

"Delawares Vs. Cherokee Rap"
Yeah you got a challenger and Jess is her name
Delaware is her tribe and winning is her game
So look out Cherokees, we're gonna knock you flat
Get your moon out of my face, don't wanna see that
So you think you're high and mighty, hanging up in the sky
That is all you're good for, but we T-Birds can fly
You say you got spirit, you say you're ready to fight
But just because you got a star don't mean that you're bright
Black versus orange, the dark side will prevail
Because we can massacre with our songs and yells
So get ready Cherokees to be put back in your places
Sit back and relax as we school you on the H's
We pledge our heads to clearer thought that in this life we face
We come to camp each year to put our rivals in their place
We pledge our hearts to loyalty that we may surely be
Delawares, to the core, for all eternity
We pledge our hands to service that we will always try
To always work together so the T-Birds can fly high
We pledge our health to living a life in which we dare
To stand up to the other tribes with confidence and flair
Whatsa matter, Cherokees? You seem a little frightened
I'm guessing that this little rhyme has gotten you enlightened
We're gonna take the stick and with it we will take you down
So just save us the trouble and GET DOWN ON THE GROUND
GET DOWN ON THE GROUND, G-G-GET DOWN ON THE GROUND
DOWN-DOWN, GET-GET-GET DOWN ON THE GROUND
YOU CHEROKEES!
 
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