i need help with my book?

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my first chapter is lexi is waking up from a car crash she hasnt opened her eyes yet but she can hear everyone around her. she kepts remembering things. when she remembers her boyfriend anthony was in the car with her she forces her eyes open. she asks about him straight away but no one knows who he is and tell her she was the only person in the car

now i haven'y been in any car accident so i have no idea how to write this as it is her point of view.
questions
How much detail do i need when i write this?
If you've been in an accident please, if you want to, tell me how it felt. What was going through your head. What did it feel lke. But only answer them if you want to.

I dont know anyone that has been in a crash that would want to talk about it. so i really need your help
thanks
 
it depends on how bad it was but here I go

screams cry outside the dead monster screams melt into sirens and wails and alarms, the huge hunk of metal at once large and fast and energetic now lays dead and dormant a hunk of crushed metal and gasoline, flames claw their way through the ripples and paint of the vehicle glass lay on the ground broken, shattered, alone, inside the car is nothing less than hell on earth. heat waves dance above your face and you can feel them unpleasantly tickling your face the smell of burning rubber wrinkles noses everything is broken, a mess, ruined, when the glass died it screamed and exploded all over your face and slap against your face everything is everywhere and you can't move for if you did something would pop or cut or fall and everything would just be ruined despite the chill of the outside air the heatwaves are enough to make you sweat and your shirt is now spoiled everything is messed up, unorderly, life could just end there you don't care nothing could be worse possibly you can't move if you wanted to and the screams are getting louder disturbing your perfect sleep and rest, your death everything... blobs are outside trying to get inside your perfect hell why? go away! stop screaming! just leave me to die! yetn they don't they ruin hell and send you off to a strange heaven that is white against red with bags of water and blood then darkness shushes you and lays you quietly to sleep...
 
Yes. I think you should put as much detail in it as you can...but not so much that it gets boring....kind of like how the Bible explains what god said to moses...how to make things....every single detail...anyway so i have never been in a car crash but my friend has. It's scary. Her thoughts were all bundled up in her head.....past and present...(kuz she hit her head) her heart wuz pounding kuz she wuz thinkin about her mom and dad and lil bro...she was so scared that for a lil while she had a couple of mental issues....freaky...hope this helped....byez....:))
 
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