I love to write poetry so what do you think?

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love is to give and also recieve
But it's only tru love if you really believe
love is the infinite power of light
evil will die at loves phenomonal sight
love comes from deep within teh heart
if you give love that means your doing your part
love can never be broken or wrecked
if evil tries to attack it will have no affect
listen to these words and look into your past
and ask your self...
did my love really last

please leave your comments about my poetry
 
i love to write poetry too. especially when i'm angry/ depressed. it makes me feel loads better.
 
So, it's a bit hackneyed. Proper grammar would be fabulous. The rhythm is forced in the fourth line. Good attempt, keep practicing.
 
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