i am writing this songs any ed-vice what i should write in it or what i should change?

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Just because I hate when people rhyme with the same word twice i'm going to nag you saying you should find different rhyming words instead of having the same word. It's not as catchy.
 
this was a song i started to write

Do me a favor
Remember when u kissed my lips
Everything just seem perfect
Just till the moment lasted
I still am feeling your lips
That was the best thing that
Ever happened to me
I know u are one for me
I never wont-ed to say this but
But every thing seem perfect

So do me favor now just kiss my lips

i dont know what to write now or some thing i should change any edvice and eles i should write in the songs
 
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