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Pankaker

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Sterling stood perfectly still, the darkness was nagging at him. As if he were in a dream. The whisper he heard, echoed in his ears again. The world seemed to have been spinning. Then quite suddenly stopped, he knelt to the ground. The dampness from the grass was seeping through his trousers. He lay down completely, on his back; he closed his eyes. For what seemed like a moment, which was really a few hours, he slept. His breathing decreased, and he fell into a deep slumber. What awoke him later, was a twig snapping. He opened his eyes slowly, and saw the most beautiful thing he had ever seen. It was a girl. She had black hair, that was halfway tied up, her bangs covered one of her eyes. But what he noticed first was her amazing smile, her cheeks were round, and she had dimples.
"Rose?" he moaned.
"I'm here now," she sighed. Sterling stood to his feet, he gently wrapped his arms around her waist, her pulled her in for a hug. Rose looked up into his eyes, hesitantly she pressed her soft lips to his. His heart lept a beat, he gently pulled her a little closer to him. He could feel her mouth form into a smile as she wrapped her hand around his neck.
 
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