How is the beginning of my teen novel?

When life gives you lemons… make lemonade. That’s what my dad always tells me when I’m stuck in a crappy situation. But to be honest, I don’t think that advice will work this one out. It feels as if I’ve been given rotten lemons, with no juice left in them, and there is just no point in making lemonade anymore.
You see, only hours ago, I was packing for my summer vacation to France. Yes, France! You know, that country in Europe with the fashion capital of the world, and some of the most beautiful architecture in the world? Well anyways, I was happily packing away, minding my own business, when my dad knocks on my door. I was surprised by this because, to be honest, me and my dad never talk. He’s always busy on his laptop in his office, or he’s at work. It’s always one or the other.
“Come in.” I said wondering what in the world he wanted to tell me.
As soon as I saw the expression on his face, I knew it couldn’t be good. You see, my dad always has one look on his face - plain, and bored. But at that moment, it was devastated. I wondered what on earth could have happened for my father to have been so sad. Millions of thoughts ran through my mind as I thought of all the possibilities. Did the fancy hotel that we were staying at in Paris burn down? Did our flight get cancelled? Turns out it was neither of those. It was much, much worse.
 
Well this reads like you're talking to someone. Is that what you were going for? Are you planning to write this in second person? As a reader, I don't want to be addressed because it pulls me out of the world you've created. Unless it's in dialogue, I would suggest not saying 'you see' or 'you know' because it's terribly distracting. Or are you planning to write it in diary form? In that case, put a date at the top of each entry. Also, most people know what France is famous for, is so I don't think you need that.

Just some food for thought. Good luck with it!
 
it's good. :) u have a couple of grammatical mistakes, but ya. its good. :)

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