How is my "Feel Free Love" poem ? otteri selvakumar?

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Love is

Cancer of heart...

Smoking

With your breath

At your love with

your mouth too lung too

Heart...

Heart is love able thing...

Love is fool full

For life some time...

Many time making love

Is wonder of the life...

Don't waste time too time

With fight to fight

Another with another

Women and men

Country too country...

White and black...

Lankan and tamilan

Too stop... stop...

Love all...

With out religion...

With out cast...

With out what...!

Feel free too love...

Love is sweet cancer...

For not only heart...

For the world people...

Also love...love...

with out heart and hands

Feel free too love love...
 
I loved the beginning. But in the middle I feel lost. I am not able to follow the too's. Maybe if I read it a few more time. Same with the ending where love is sweet-down to with out heart and hands...I thought that was good also, but then your last line...I am lost again.


I re-read it a few more times. I understand that your saying love is many things esp. free, but to me-My opinion-middle is jagged.
other than that I thought it was good.
 
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