How does my book sound?

Maggie

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Okay its about
a girl that finds a stalion in the middle of her neborhood, and her mom forces her to train so they can sell the horse. When the horse ends up being sold, but the night before the girl takes the horse w/ her best friend and runs away from home

Here is a little piece of it

"Go Now please" My mom ordered. I put down the carton of milk and stomped outside to the stalion. There she was, tied up to the fence. I couldn't see her face, just her rear end. I walked around her slowly, I've never worked with a wild horse before. I slowly walked towards her neck and she glanced at me. Our eyes met, my jeans rubbed against her legs. Mom was right, she was a tall one. I took the halter off her and grabbed the bit.
I held on to her as tight as i could and when i took the bit towards her mouth, she just opend her mouth, waiting for me to place it on her. "You weird horse" i whispered to myself.
 
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