how do you interpret this poem?

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dnylakbr

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When he has ideas, I have work
When they have ideas, we have work
If it doesn't come with a letter grade, he doesn't care
If it doesn't make them money, they don't care
If it's convenient for him, feelings don't matter
If it's convenient for them, feelings don't matter
We can't rebel- we've been brainwashed to conform

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You probably wouldn't know this if I didn't tell you but "he" is actually my dad
"they" can be anyone you like its up to interpretation
I was inspired to write this just today because I realized my dad doesnt care about anything but my grades he just thinks my sports and other interests are a hassle and something he has to drag me around town for =.=



Here's what I was aiming for when I wrote this:
"he" is my dad
"they" is any 'evil' corporation, or any component of government if you want
"they" is really open to opinion I don't have a meaning devoted to it

Also, my teacher introduced us to the idea that some people think WalMart (among other companies) is an 'evil' corporation that was my inspiration for the "they" lines.
 
It's actually an interesting form, and I think I liked it a little better without the explanation. Poetry should really speak for itself in the mind of the reader.

For example, before I read your explanation, it seemed to me as if "he" could be a teacher, and "we" could be students. It seemed to sort of alternate point of view between that of a student and that of a teacher. Sort of like...Dueling Gripes...(This probably came into my mind because I am a high school teacher, and my students often complain about all the ideas teachers have turn into homework for them, and teachers often complain about the students not being interested in learning things, but only in earning the grades that will keep them out of trouble at home.)

However, after reading your explanation, your poem is still interesting. I think that if you do want your readers to have a more specific interpretation of what you are talking about, you should somehow work a few more clues about it into the text.

Overall, though, a good draft. Keep working on it.
 
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