How can I improve the dialogue in my story. Plz help me!?

Jane

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(Jean and Johnny are talking about a forbidden date)

Johnny looked around before grabbing Jean's hands. "Jean I didn't know how to contact you."
"Why didn't you just text me?"
"I know Catherine goes on her friend's cell phones."
"I want to spend time with you, just you and me."
"I . . . I don't know."
"I'll plan it all out. Please Jean give me a chance, do you want to come out with me?"
Jean felt the longing in his voice. "Yes, I think it might be fun." She said.
"What do I tell Catherine?"
"I don't know, should we say anything?"
"I think we should."
"Yeah, maybe."
"Or maybe we'll just not."
"Johnny!" She laughed.
What action would you add. He is direct and she is extremely shy
 
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