How can I improve my poem "Comin' Soon to your Neighborhood?"?

[Elaine P]

Comin’ Soon to Your Neighborhood

Starship flippin’, trippin’, slippin’
Through the heavens, past the Moon
Poets reachin’, graspin’, grippin’
Hang on tight! We’ll be there soon.

Blastin’, castin’ all doubts aside
Up through Earth’s dead atmosphere
Meet me in Kansas for the ride
Soon, my Martians, we’ll be there!

 

[amirnorman]

cool, you should write a kids book based on this poem they'll love it

 

[elyslund]

8-7-8-7...nope, can't do no better!!! a-b-a-b...not one doubt here...

For this poem, and for what Elaine did for TD and Dr. Swetman yesterday...CHEERS!!!!!!

 

[Blue]

don't be mad!
it's perfect

 

[DMag]

Improve????

Are you crazy??

Bingo!