boredoms a curse
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This is the opening paragraph not all gramma is in yet even though i have to hand it in tomorrow.
"They say that in the last moments of life you finally understand it all, why we go to work, why we fight wars, and why some of us believe in a higher being. I didn’t find this supreme understanding, No all I saw was darkness, a never ending pit of darkness and on the fringe of it something was moving. Something uncontrollable something beyond imagination, to it I’m just another number in its tally, a tally of the dead a tally that stays constant, as no one can escape death."
what is a good way for this story to go that explores betrayel, redemption while having an underlying urgency to it, please serious answers only
and please dont say this is inspired by twilight because ive never read twilight, the opening monologue is based more on the monologue of Max Payne (the movie version), and a little on the monster on the edge of the darkness mentioned in torchwood by suzie when shes brought back
i posted the opening paragraph last night to get peoples opinions then i got writers block and couldnt expand on it
should i explore what lead to their death or should i have them escape death and make it back to the world of the living only to be hunted by the monster on the edge of the darkness
i did think of this myself i was inspired to open with a monologue by max payne other wise it wouldnt have one. and the monster on the edge of darkness was mentioned once in torchwood but it grabbed hold of my imagination, this is only inspired by those sources the story is my own original creation.
Alot of authors even if they dont notice it reference popular culture
and yes i should have said inspired by instead of based on
"They say that in the last moments of life you finally understand it all, why we go to work, why we fight wars, and why some of us believe in a higher being. I didn’t find this supreme understanding, No all I saw was darkness, a never ending pit of darkness and on the fringe of it something was moving. Something uncontrollable something beyond imagination, to it I’m just another number in its tally, a tally of the dead a tally that stays constant, as no one can escape death."
what is a good way for this story to go that explores betrayel, redemption while having an underlying urgency to it, please serious answers only
and please dont say this is inspired by twilight because ive never read twilight, the opening monologue is based more on the monologue of Max Payne (the movie version), and a little on the monster on the edge of the darkness mentioned in torchwood by suzie when shes brought back
i posted the opening paragraph last night to get peoples opinions then i got writers block and couldnt expand on it
should i explore what lead to their death or should i have them escape death and make it back to the world of the living only to be hunted by the monster on the edge of the darkness
i did think of this myself i was inspired to open with a monologue by max payne other wise it wouldnt have one. and the monster on the edge of darkness was mentioned once in torchwood but it grabbed hold of my imagination, this is only inspired by those sources the story is my own original creation.
Alot of authors even if they dont notice it reference popular culture
and yes i should have said inspired by instead of based on