Hi, can you please tell me what you think of my poetry? Here are some of my poems:
SOMEONE
Someone save me from this fate
Someone lead me to the gate
Someone hand me keys to hope
Someone hug me, help me cope
Someone tell me I'm the one
Someone help me touch the sun
Someone whisper to my ear
"You can do it, just don't fear,"
Someone hearten me to dream
Someone hide me from the seen
Someone set forth change in me
Someone change the world I see.
Dawn
A faint mist ripples the morning air
landing on blossoms like faires
light shines on the mistiness
forming rainbows of dew
bird calls fill the air
new beginnings
as faires awake.
Dawn.
MOON
Shining
Calming
Hiding
Haunting
Glowing in the shining, haunting sky
The moon, always calming, hiding me
BALLERINA
White dress, hand in air
Slippers glide across the floor
Enchanted beauty
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As we grow older
I drift apart from you
But inside my heart I hold special these memoires
Of swinging in the heavens
Hiding in the rainforest
Escaping evil wizards
I really miss those evenings
of slurping up spaghetti
or whispering about happenings
Sometimes when I visit you
I glimpse a tiny spark
Of what it used to be
But then the rain cloud
surfaces again, shielding
me from you
As we sleep in the open tent
playing board games to the sound of splattering rain
I again remember
My foot hits the ball
and passes it to you, but
its still not the same
We used to be a team
winning every game
overcoming every barrier
But now it's different.
Distance cannot change
What our friendship used to be
but it changes what it is
Long letters give way to postcards
Forever phone calls to quick chats
BFFs to memories
But I still remember.
SOMEONE
Someone save me from this fate
Someone lead me to the gate
Someone hand me keys to hope
Someone hug me, help me cope
Someone tell me I'm the one
Someone help me touch the sun
Someone whisper to my ear
"You can do it, just don't fear,"
Someone hearten me to dream
Someone hide me from the seen
Someone set forth change in me
Someone change the world I see.
Dawn
A faint mist ripples the morning air
landing on blossoms like faires
light shines on the mistiness
forming rainbows of dew
bird calls fill the air
new beginnings
as faires awake.
Dawn.
MOON
Shining
Calming
Hiding
Haunting
Glowing in the shining, haunting sky
The moon, always calming, hiding me
BALLERINA
White dress, hand in air
Slippers glide across the floor
Enchanted beauty
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As we grow older
I drift apart from you
But inside my heart I hold special these memoires
Of swinging in the heavens
Hiding in the rainforest
Escaping evil wizards
I really miss those evenings
of slurping up spaghetti
or whispering about happenings
Sometimes when I visit you
I glimpse a tiny spark
Of what it used to be
But then the rain cloud
surfaces again, shielding
me from you
As we sleep in the open tent
playing board games to the sound of splattering rain
I again remember
My foot hits the ball
and passes it to you, but
its still not the same
We used to be a team
winning every game
overcoming every barrier
But now it's different.
Distance cannot change
What our friendship used to be
but it changes what it is
Long letters give way to postcards
Forever phone calls to quick chats
BFFs to memories
But I still remember.