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Elloz
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Lol, I don't think I actually have poem writing skills.. but I like to write poems and it's fun, so yeah.
I wrote one of the 2 following poems for class. I'm not sure if they're that great, but that's for you to decide. I'm just wondering what people think of my poems... so any ideas, comments, advice, criticism, is welcomed. Oh, and if I used any kinda wrong formatting, sorry, I'm not a super poem pro kinda person. I just write em
And, if you have any name ideas, that's fine too.
What good does it make?
When nothing is taken as more than hate
When those who can see are clearly blind,
But those who can’t would never mind
Then there are those who are just plain rude,
Treating other people with a sick attitude
How did they come to be this way?
Do they not feel the guilt and disgrace?
And if they did, who would care?
There’s really no use for a word like Fair
But not like that matters anyways,
Cause those who care are left without praise
Well it seems as though they don’t care at all,
But if I had a choice, I would watch them fall
Cause mistakes can always turn around,
Like booming trucks to ants with no sound
But in the end, maybe they will prevail
Cause those who try, are less likely to fail
Though failing is not really the problem you see,
The problem is that the world could be free (but it’s not XP)
^ for english class
v for fun
I’ve never ever felt this way,
I don't know what to say
There’s something burning up,
Think it could just be love
I’ve never been the same,
For this, there’s you to blame
But there’s something telling me,
That we could never be
Every time I think about you,
You make my life feel so brand new
Every time I dream about you,
You’ll always by my side
Promise me you stay always be with me,
We’ll be as happy as we can be
Promise me you stay always by my side,
No matter, what it takes to be here
Sorry if it's a lot to read, but I appreciate those who take the time to read it or just clicking my link and looking at how long it is, then leaving. Thanks.
I wrote one of the 2 following poems for class. I'm not sure if they're that great, but that's for you to decide. I'm just wondering what people think of my poems... so any ideas, comments, advice, criticism, is welcomed. Oh, and if I used any kinda wrong formatting, sorry, I'm not a super poem pro kinda person. I just write em
And, if you have any name ideas, that's fine too.What good does it make?
When nothing is taken as more than hate
When those who can see are clearly blind,
But those who can’t would never mind
Then there are those who are just plain rude,
Treating other people with a sick attitude
How did they come to be this way?
Do they not feel the guilt and disgrace?
And if they did, who would care?
There’s really no use for a word like Fair
But not like that matters anyways,
Cause those who care are left without praise
Well it seems as though they don’t care at all,
But if I had a choice, I would watch them fall
Cause mistakes can always turn around,
Like booming trucks to ants with no sound
But in the end, maybe they will prevail
Cause those who try, are less likely to fail
Though failing is not really the problem you see,
The problem is that the world could be free (but it’s not XP)
^ for english class
v for fun
I’ve never ever felt this way,
I don't know what to say
There’s something burning up,
Think it could just be love
I’ve never been the same,
For this, there’s you to blame
But there’s something telling me,
That we could never be
Every time I think about you,
You make my life feel so brand new
Every time I dream about you,
You’ll always by my side
Promise me you stay always be with me,
We’ll be as happy as we can be
Promise me you stay always by my side,
No matter, what it takes to be here
Sorry if it's a lot to read, but I appreciate those who take the time to read it or just clicking my link and looking at how long it is, then leaving. Thanks.