Hi... hey tell me somethin is this poem good? ^_^?

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*bye*

all who call me friend never say hi,
all i know as friend, is there good byes,
always wishing someone would say hi,
always getting a dead reply,

two much lies! i have no friends!
its all a lie! i'm alone!
trying to make a friend before i die,
before i die,

i want a friend!
i want a friend! i want a friend!!
nothingness replys, nothingness replys,
nothingness replys.

"the gun falls, the boy drops, the blood pores, my soul dies"

1 out of 10
was it two much rhyme? need more details? what tell me?
 
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