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West Daddy
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hey what do you guys think of this poem. Its called Walk.
curves flow
ankles
calves
thighs
hips
back
waist
slow rhythmic
one
two
three
four
paths traced in
scent
shadow
allure
undulating reflection of some thing more
primal
desperate
controlled release
smoke
smolder
burn
what makes this not a poem. is it the structuture? I thought that not all poems had to fallow a structure. I was trying to be more like old beat nick poems but I'm not sure how to get there.
Would it help any one to know that its suposed to be abou the way a woman walks?
curves flow
ankles
calves
thighs
hips
back
waist
slow rhythmic
one
two
three
four
paths traced in
scent
shadow
allure
undulating reflection of some thing more
primal
desperate
controlled release
smoke
smolder
burn
what makes this not a poem. is it the structuture? I thought that not all poems had to fallow a structure. I was trying to be more like old beat nick poems but I'm not sure how to get there.
Would it help any one to know that its suposed to be abou the way a woman walks?