Hey I was just wondering if you guys think this poem is any good?

[me and only me]

My never ending nightmare ended
When i saw your face and heard your song
With yesterdays nightmare fresh on my mind
I took as chance
A chance on you and a chance on love
But also a chance of falling and a chance at pain
I asked that when i fell for you
You would be there to catch me
I thought... I knew that i was better than him
But as the words played out in front of my face
I saw that maybe i was wrong
That when you stumbled he was there to catch you
And that was more than i thought it was
So as I fell i realized that all that was going to catch me
Was the cold hard pavement
This was the chance I took and I knew this could happen
But it hurt that much more knowing I didnt fall for you
I willing dove head first
But all that I can say
Is that from down here one the pavement
You look even more Beautiful

 

[Olivia-Mary x]

Oh My God,, That's... Amazing And This Spell Checker Thing Is Getting On My Nerves, Maybe ii Like A Lot Of Punctuation!!

But Anyways ii Think Your Poems Really Good

Is It For Someone Special?? Because If It Is Makes It Even Better,, That You Can Open Up And Write Like That... Im Feeling Ive Written Way Too Much Now So Yeah,, ii Hope That's Not The Only One You've Written Because Your Really Good x

 

[rangle416]

It's okay. Some of the lines are too long and rambling, maybe split them up a bit. But it's sweet.

 

[La fele]

Great a part from the last bit it sounds like you like looking up her skirt or something