I want your comments about the quality of this , and, tell me what mistake I made in Grammar case
"I want to write about you , but when I remember your name my hands tremble
I still sing about you amorously , your hands presence is hide in the house
I dream your eyes , tomorrow the world is sunny
U become my dream -come-true, I rich to my desires
I know you'll come again , my sky'll be sunny
Again , spring comes toward flowers behind the window
I'll wait for you, if you hear my voice
Lean on my shoulders , hear my songs
Gift me a bundle of kindness to my lonely world
Don't be strange with my heart , drift in my roam …
"I want to write about you , but when I remember your name my hands tremble
I still sing about you amorously , your hands presence is hide in the house
I dream your eyes , tomorrow the world is sunny
U become my dream -come-true, I rich to my desires
I know you'll come again , my sky'll be sunny
Again , spring comes toward flowers behind the window
I'll wait for you, if you hear my voice
Lean on my shoulders , hear my songs
Gift me a bundle of kindness to my lonely world
Don't be strange with my heart , drift in my roam …