Help with my sonnet. Does it make sense to you? Changes?

Shayla

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The rosy lawn flowers began to wake.
That love that time could see inside this head
Has left this heart alone to die and ache
The times had gone and soon to join the dead

This season, the reason, to build a clock
Oh how to turn back time and live the lost
moments I gave. The gears will soon unlock
it all again and life will be the cost.

I met with the love I felt once more
That clock for now, it came from heaven sent
At last, this past, my mind will store.
The clock it ticks, my life, her life, it went.

A voice it calls, the clock, it stops, and struck.
This life, my life, it leaves not left amuck



It's due tomorrow and I'm a terrible poet. I had in mind of an old man with a life and time he wanted to relive...so he built a clock, relived it, and heaven struck his time and called him back. Gahhhhh please help. Thank you so much.
 
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