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As men board the boats and as pilots prepare for their flight to Dieppe, Germans were organizing their own invasion. The almighty German air force was resting near by, in the airports of France, preparing for an assault with would bring them victory. During the chaotic battle, the Luftwaffe, German’s glorious air force, has suffered an important defeat4, effectively crippled its plans of another possible invasion. As well, enemy prisoners were taken and a great deal of information concerning enemy dispositions and methods was obtained5. Furthermore, German’s extensive radar network along the coast of Europe was revealed, with aspect of their displacement shown to the Allies through one heroic act by RAF Flight Sergeant Jack Nissenthall, a Canadian pilot6. Now complete with knowledge about the radars, the Allies were able to develop a system which was later used to block its transmissions, thus, crippling Germans’ detectors. By removing the threat of the invasion of Britain as well as gaining essential military intelligence, the Raid of Dieppe has achieve and went beyond Allies’ expectations.
Can anyone rewrite this to make it sound better...?
Help will be extremly appreciated (I have way too many projects.....)
I think this paragraph is in need of serious fix
Here it is
As men board the boats and as pilots prepare for their flight to Dieppe, Germans were organizing their own invasion. The almighty German air force was resting near by, in the airports of France, preparing for an assault with would bring them victory. During the chaotic battle, the Luftwaffe, German’s glorious air force, has suffered an important defeat4, effectively crippled its plans of another possible invasion. As well, enemy prisoners were taken and a great deal of information concerning enemy dispositions and methods was obtained5. Furthermore, German’s extensive radar network along the coast of Europe was revealed, with aspect of their displacement shown to the Allies through one heroic act by RAF Flight Sergeant Jack Nissenthall, a Canadian pilot6. Now complete with knowledge about the radars, the Allies were able to develop a system which was later used to block its transmissions, thus, crippling Germans’ detectors. By removing the threat of the invasion of Britain as well as gaining essential military intelligence, the Raid of Dieppe has achieve and went beyond Allies’ expectations.
Can anyone rewrite this to make it sound better...?
Help will be extremly appreciated (I have way too many projects.....)