HELP!! I wrote this song when my girlfriend broke up with me. What do you think?

Ray S

New member
Here's the lyrics. The guitar part is very Jack Johnson-ish. I think they're pretty good, but what do you think? Should I record it and give it to her? It's called "You With Me". Thanks!

I don't understand why you made your stand
And got up and walked away
You know it ain't fair to say you still care
When you hurt me that way

But when you realize that it ain't right
You'll come back to me
And what we do will be up to you
Cause I still want you with me
I still want you with me

This cigarette won't stay lit
And this bottle won't stay full
I ain't living right since you left my life
And you walked out that door

But you'll come around when you're feeling down
And you'll come back to me
And what we do will be up to you
Cause I still want you with me
I still want you with me

And now you say that we can't be friends, and that's the end
So now I'm leaving you far behind so I don't waste my time

Guitar Solo

But when you realize that it ain't right
You'll come back to me
I'll turn you away cause you had your days
And I don't want you with me
I don't want you with me
 
Back
Top